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iii.
"you're not okay."
"I'm fine."
"no, you're lying. i can tell. everyone has a trigger."
"What's mine?"
"you smile."

ix.
she's walking around in circles
and trying to pick up her broken pieces, but they're
not fitting like they used to,
something's damaged beyond repair.

v.
"Why are you doing this to yourself?"
"because i've forgotten what it feels like to heal."

viii.
she regrets not cutting deeper, when she sees the life
still running through her veins, and her parents asleep
on the hospital chairs.

ii.
she comes to school the next day with a bandaged hand
and blue eyes that seem a bit dimmer.
"i broke a mirror."
and
her cracks speak louder than her words.

iv.
she slams her locker door and almost hits the boy walking past
and if this was a movie, she thinks, they'd fall in love
but this is real life, and she is too damaged to even
love herself.
she's too broken and he's too oblivious
and it's too goddamn late, no matter how pretty his smile.

vii.
they find her on the bathroom floor,
"why? why? why?"
she wants to ask her mother to let her bleed out
onto the tile, then take a picture.
it might make a nice Christmas card
but there's too much white gauze and white tiles
and white lights- too many angels to make any good angles.

i.
her Spanish binder rings won't close
all the way and it is the metaphorical straw
that breaks the camel's back.

vi.
"Hey, you haven't been to school in a couple of days
and we're really mis-"

delete.
this poem is written in the wrong order, because it's a metaphor, see. Like how she tried to put her life back together (but got so many things wrong in the wrong place), i did the same with this poem.

sorry it's confusing. i liked it.
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kmills95 Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, i didn't even realise you had numbered them out of order.... but looking at it now i think it adds a lot.

your poetry is incredible.
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ItRainsInUtopia Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012  Student Writer
I LOVE this!!! I especially love how it's out of order :)
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missingnumbers Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012  Student Writer
the out of order idea is very original and works effectively. the poem works when read in both the current order and when it's in the "proper" order, which is really interesting. very well done.
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reflectionsinwater Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It still works even if you read it as it is. There are many good verses in there that flow as natural speech and the structure is lovely. Well done :D
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Darkphoenix747 Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
That was really well done! I liked it!
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KittySib Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012
I really, REALLY liked this. It's remnicent of me in many ways, and yet so crystal clear and fractured. Amazing!:D
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pinktwirlz Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Dude...I love this. Like seriously. It's awesome. Especially the last two verses.
I'm a writer yet I can't seem to put this into words. It's very...captivating to say the least.
Well done.
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Very intense. I like that it's out of order. I think it works well. =)
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