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Seven year old Adysen Reader
Took her mother's most fancy wine glass
And filled it with apple juice,
All the while telling me that one day,
She'd really be able to taste the stars.

"You know," she tells me, "You could jump from the
Empire State building and survive."
I tell her she's wrong, and that you'll die.
"No, no," she insists, "it's not the jump that kills you- it's the ground-
The sky just hugs you and wishes he didn't have to let go."

Ady's been able to draw since she was four,
But she hasn't been an artist till she was nine, and
Manned up enough to tell me that she really didn't
Believe in dragons, but she hopes we can still be friends.

In sixth grade, I read her the story of Icarus,
And how he fell to his death because he wanted too much
With too little.

(Spoiler Alert: We're still friends)

Ady has never been afraid of asking boys out.
She says it's better to know he doesn't like her
Then to be sitting around wondering if he does.
Two boys, two strikes out, and she tells
Me with sad eyes,
"He didn't mean to go too close to the sun. He didn't mean to fall.
He just wanted to fly."

Adysen is the only person I know who likes
Brownies better than cake,
And she doesn't believe in luck.
When she dropped her mother's fancy wine glass,
Her hands shook cleaning it up,
And she blamed it on the apple juice champagne
When her vision started blurring.
She works on the computer more than with a sketch pad,
But that's okay, because she says she likes animation more.
She lies a lot, but it's the necessary lies, like "I'm okay,"
And "you really are my friend".

Adysen will always be an artist.

Ten years later, she'll see
Icarus flying in her real starry champagne
And she'll still be most afraid of falling
{in love}
People on Paper 9

Adysen has been a friend of mine since first grade, when I asked everyone if they believed in dragons and she was the only one who said yes.

She always thinks I'm mad at her when I call her Adysen instead of Ady. (I'm not, I jut think it's a very pretty name.)

So let me just clear a few points in this poem, to "make the meaning be much cleared", like a friend of mine said.

1. The starry champagne and any references to starry champagne. That's actually talking about her mother's wine glass, as it actually did have stars on it, and you know the phrase, "close enough to touch the stars"? You don't "touch" drinks, so I changed it to "taste". And from there, I kind of jumped to how successful she'll be. Because one day, she'd be able to touch the stars. That wine glass represents all of what she is and what she will be. It represents her future and her future accomplishments, so when she drops it and it breaks she starts crying. At the end when it says "Icarus flying in the bottom of her real starry champagne", that's talking about how in the future she'll have accomplished everything she wanted to, and now the wine glass isn't metaphorical, but it actually has champagne.

2. Icarus- falling/falling in love. Ady's sworn off boys, because she says they're stupid, but I think she just got hurt too often.

3. "you really are my friend." i'm probably not, to be honest.
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LeftUnfinished Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Really beautiful. Icarus is another great topic to write about. Check out mine?
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NaomiARey Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Student Writer
The poem was lovely. Could you find a way to tuck a word here and there so that you wouldn't have to include a "clear a few points" section? Like the mother's "star-etched" wine glasses. Implications of the poem are the reader's part. Your role is just to tell the story beautifully (which you have done).
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MisfitableGrae Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013   Writer
Yeah, that would probably be so much smarter. The points, especially the first one, had to be cleared up because I submitted this poem to an artist guild thing, and a teacher asked if I had plagiarized the line about the starry champagne from The Fault in Our Stars, by John Green. Even though I love that book, I definitely didn't actually plagiarize because I literally meant that the wine glasses had stars in them.

Your way is so much easier and I wish I had thought about it, but...I hadn't and so I wrote all of that down. :/ Thank you though!
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NaomiARey Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Student Writer
you're very welcome! Glad I could help :)
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PossumFan Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is sweet. I really love it.

+ fave
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Relixala Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2012
I really love your People on Paper poems. Something about the way you write is just fantastic.

Also, fun fact about the 'tasting the stars' bit: the monk who invented champagne famously called to his companions: "Come quick! I am tasting the stars!"
I don't know if that reference was intentional but it seems to fit quite nicely with what you pointed out in your description. :)
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Lacewinged-Beauty Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012   Writer

I really enjoyed this piece.
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simplyfeel Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Great story you told within a poem. I enjoyed it very much. I don't really know what else to say. There's just something about this poem. It has that certain something, ya know?
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Sparsilian Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
love it :heart:
wish i could be half as cohesive as this piece. it flows beautifully.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is so beautiful. My favorite parts are the dialogue. It's perfectly innocent in a child-like way, but it also shows the thoughts and feelings everyone is afraid to feel. Your friend sounds amazing, and you are a lovely writer.
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